Sariel
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Sariel
Oct 16, 2010 23:37:47 GMT -5
Post by Sariel on Oct 16, 2010 23:37:47 GMT -5
Still mostly in her planning stage, going to ask for opinions anyways. trleague.wikia.com/wiki/Sariel_EchelonTried not to lay on the ~omg dramatic past~ too thick. My original backstory was a lot darker but I'm not sure I want to get so noir with this one. I plan to elaborate more on her Pokemon and Hoenn adventure, because I clearly don't have enough walls of text on my page. Hit me with thoughts or complaints or whatever.
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 1:42:36 GMT -5
Post by cephalgia on Oct 17, 2010 1:42:36 GMT -5
Whoa, there's pretty much no Mary Sue to be found in there whatsoever. Exemplary!
I found her story interesting too. It's sad how she became so ostracized.
Nonetheless, this character gets all my support. ALL OF IT. Yeah!!!!!!!! (Can has Homestuck fist bump?)
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humanmango
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 3:51:53 GMT -5
Post by humanmango on Oct 17, 2010 3:51:53 GMT -5
I have to say, that's a really developed character you have there. The only quip I have with her is the seemingly heavy social commentary that her background entails, although keeping mention of social issues to a minimum is just one of my personal preferences that may or may not be shared by many others. The richness of the profile more than makes up for it anyways; this is a superb character you have here. Also, that's some pretty heavy sprite-work you've done there; I especially like the original hair and the added ahoge. The character design itself kinda reminded me of Miki here.
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 8:37:54 GMT -5
Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 17, 2010 8:37:54 GMT -5
Where has character development like this been all my life?
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Sariel
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 17:10:23 GMT -5
Post by Sariel on Oct 17, 2010 17:10:23 GMT -5
Thanks for the overwhelmingly positive response, haha. FIST-BUNP, I am a huge MSPA nerd and I'm glad to see one of my own here.
Social commentary greatly interests me. I love psychology, I think humans are beautiful and terrible monsters and I love to expand on and think about interactions between them. I agree that there's plenty thrown in there, though, and it's a little overwhelming compared to the other content in her backstory. I plan to at least touch it up a little.
Thanks for the compliments on her design, too. Sariel has been inhabiting my mind for at least a year now, and that was the first aspect of hers that I fleshed out.
nyoro~n Thanks for such lovely praise.
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 17:13:10 GMT -5
Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 17, 2010 17:13:10 GMT -5
As a long time writefag, I am somewhat jealous of your ability to create things like this. As a big movie person, character development is something I always nitpick at, and I can't find much of anything wrong at all with her.
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Sariel
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 17:26:27 GMT -5
Post by Sariel on Oct 17, 2010 17:26:27 GMT -5
Heheh. Everyone's style is different; character development is something that I really push myself on. I HATE HATE HATE flat characters and characters that don't evolve and change over the course of a story, and strive to infuse life into my own. Apparently, I've gotten good at it, and once more I am overwhelmed by your praise.
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 17:46:11 GMT -5
Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 17, 2010 17:46:11 GMT -5
Hey, if it's not too much to ask, could you take a look at my character, and let me know what you think? I know the mini-backstories on his Pokemon could use some work (they were written rather early in the morning without coffee), but I just want some feedback on the character as a whole.
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Sariel
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 17:49:39 GMT -5
Post by Sariel on Oct 17, 2010 17:49:39 GMT -5
Yeah, of course! I can't do it right this minute (dinner arrangements) but I'd be glad to look over your character when I get back.
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Sariel
Oct 17, 2010 17:52:32 GMT -5
Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 17, 2010 17:52:32 GMT -5
Excellent, much appreciated.
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Sariel
Oct 18, 2010 18:53:56 GMT -5
Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 18, 2010 18:53:56 GMT -5
Also, crazy idea. I was considering writing a story with Gordon and Sariel as the two main characters. This would likely be a cooperative effort, and I just wanted to run this idea by you to see what you thought.
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Sariel
Oct 18, 2010 20:36:18 GMT -5
Post by Sariel on Oct 18, 2010 20:36:18 GMT -5
Definitely not opposed to it. I'm interested about what you have in mind.
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Sariel
Oct 18, 2010 20:48:18 GMT -5
Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 18, 2010 20:48:18 GMT -5
I'll sleep on the details, flesh out a bigger concept in my head, and I'll let you know what I come up with.
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Sariel
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Sariel
Oct 18, 2010 20:51:00 GMT -5
Post by Sariel on Oct 18, 2010 20:51:00 GMT -5
Sounds good! Lookin' forward to it.
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