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Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 14, 2010 19:20:39 GMT -5
trleague.wikia.com/wiki/Gordon_TulaneBased on a character from my writefagging. Trying to avoid Mary Sue-ing as much as possible, let me know if something is wrong in those terms, I will attempt to fix it.
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Post by cephalgia on Oct 14, 2010 23:28:14 GMT -5
Looking good. Maybe bring in some more backstory whenever you think of it, such as how he gets his other Pokemon.
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Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 15, 2010 19:10:27 GMT -5
I didn't want to into too much detail there because I wasn't feeling too incredibly imaginative, and I really didn't want to write stories for 5 other Pokemon at once.
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Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 16, 2010 8:23:40 GMT -5
Okay, updated the page a little to have stories of Sceptile, Feebas, and Honchkrow so far. I'll finish up the other two when I'm actually awake...
I need coffee...
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Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 17, 2010 15:47:42 GMT -5
Okay, Metang story done, though it WAS written pretty damned early. I guess it could use some work later on. Thinking of how he came across Heracross (NO PUN INTENDED AT ALL). Throw in ideas if you really want to.
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Post by Sariel on Oct 17, 2010 19:39:13 GMT -5
I like your character. There are a lot of strong points about him, like how every aspect of his profile connects seamlessly with the other, and how closely his story intertwines with the Tatsu region itself (I took the easy way out and wrote most of mine from the standpoint of the canonically-established regions, haha). I particularly enjoy the little descriptive bits about each of his Pokemon, too. There's very little Mary Sue-ism to be seen so far.
However, I'm not gonna lie, there could be more to work with here. Maybe it's just because I like to excessively flesh out my characters, but I feel there could be a lot more descriptiveness to his personality - I can't really "feel" the character. Of course, I understand this is a work in progress, and I have some personal tastes regarding character stylization that not everyone shares.
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Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 17, 2010 20:15:34 GMT -5
Thanks a bunch. I know, the personality section is a little thin, but again, I, for some stupid reason, enjoy writing these things far too early in the morning, or far too late at night. I'll add to it, don't worry. Also, Heracross soon.
Side Note: In case you're all wondering, my name isn't actually Gordon. Hilarious long story behind that moniker, but to save time and text space, my friend's mom is an idiot who'd forgotten my name and accidentally introduced me to my friend's dad as Gordon. I've used the name at least once in each of my stories ever since.
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Post by GordonTheWritefag on Oct 28, 2010 18:25:47 GMT -5
I finally finished Gordon's Pokemon backstories. Added a bunch to the rest as well as writing Heracross.
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